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“Very funny.  Laughed out loud at the quirky, exaggerated (yet still occasionally subtle) performances.  Thought there could have perhaps been more business at the beginning with getting ready.  Thought the character’s wake-up moment was a little predictable.  Love the POV shot down the stairs and the interchange between husband and wife when he points out all the things that are missing or “new.”  Great performances.” -Richard Ramsey
“Great production value all around (loved the shot going down the stairs with the fuzzy ball in the frame). However, I watched it twice and I still didn’t understand it. Reading the summary made the story clear, but neither the fact that 1)  they had been burglarized or 2) the wife was trying to cover it up was clear within the film itself.” -Evan Derrick
“Love the POV shot with the hat, well edited. Very good performances. Not sure the payoff is clear, should be more obvious they were robbed, first time thru, thought maybe the wife was just a grinch or had sold everything, etc.” -Ash Greyson
“Congratulations on the big win!

Since the excitement will soon fade over the next few weeks, I wanted to share a few thoughts to prepare you for making even better films. First let me share that you clearly have a lot of good things happening in your list of abilities and the successful team you pulled together. Second, there are a couple areas where you have room for improvement – The most important is story.

Many filmmakers make the films they want to make with no concern for their audience. For instance, if you’re a home schooler who got into film, you can probably make shows ideal for that market without much thought. However, if you want to reach the world with your message, consideration must be given to multiple market segments, some of which you may detest.

When I create a universal story that can cross markets, I start with the end in mind – The message I want the audience talking about as they leave the theater. I then tie to the message a benefit for each market segment that I want to reach. That benefit is then tied to a character within the film that represents the market. The main character can then touch that life in such a way as to direct the character to make the right kind of decisions regardless of his or her upbringing. In other words, by influencing the supporting characters, you can influence the audience segment.

Your story started to allude to a secondary segment, but it wasn’t brought out fully. This leads me to believe you have the capability of getting to the next level of success by making films that are received well by multiple market segments. Financially, this will make for a nice future and spiritually, you’ll be able to impact many lives with your messages.” -CJ Powers

Matt Blick
Tim Miller
Christina Wallace
J. Scranton

I’m from Canada and I would like to show you my top reasons for why you should visit.
(Okay, I’m way over time. First upload failed and was garbled, second took way too long; third failed again; fourth was the charm. So, I know this won’t make it, but, hope this can get out to the list for people to watch and hopefully enjoy.)

“Very funny performance and monologue.  I like how you moved in relation to the camera (and credited that to your editing score), but thought the camera should have occasionally moved as well (or been refocused)...if nothing else for the purpose of creating a shallow depth of field.  I also thought for comic effect you could have used audio besides dialogue.  For example, desolate, chilling wind-especially when you run far away from the camera.  The video was well-paced and entertaining.” -Richard Ramsey
“Kudos to you for pulling this off all by yourself.Your tight editing made what otherwise would have been a dull talking head interesting.” -Evan Derrick
“Goofy and enjoyable lead actor. Needed some sound (howling maybe) when he ran off like a dog. Not a developed “film” but a solid monologue. Nice pacing.” -Ash Greyson
“Controversy! That is the word I associate with a film that stirs arguments among the judges for over three hours. Should Canada take 1st, 2nd or 3rd place? Should the top films be marketable or just good? And, on and on the discussions went.

If I remember correctly, all judges laughed out loud with your film. One became a clear advocate for your film because of how it moved him with humor. Another wasn’t impressed because when all is said and done, the film didn’t add one bit to anyone’s life – Which started another argument.

The most important thing about film is to be a catalyst for healthy and Godly ideas/discussions. While your film certainly became a catalyst, it wasn’t necessarily for anything that would improve my life, perspective or the community in which I live. Frankly, aside from a few moments of laughter and several hours of arguments, I didn’t walk away with anything from your film that would help me to remember it a month from now.

Here’s the thing, I’m a little biased when I see someone with your talent, who has the ability to read the audience and make them laugh. I strongly desire that you make films that will change our hearts and thoughts. And so, I walk away from your film being disappointed that you didn’t use your skills to make a difference in my life. The irony is that I have no right to expect it of you. The choice is solely yours.

I am, however, thrilled that God has gifted you with incredible ability. I’m thankful that you brought laughter into my house and office. I’m glad your story was deemed by many of your peers to be the best. Clearly you are standing on the brink of a great future in film. Praise God!

Going forward, whether to plant seeds of joy into someone’s life or touch them in a way that changes their worldview forever, it is all your choice. You are not accountable to your peers, your audience or us judges. You are only accountable to God for the gifts he has given you. As a result, I highly recommend that you make intentional choices and don’t produce anything on a whim. Make the moment you have with the person you’ve never met that is watching your film count. Do it with purpose.

Congratulations on your achievement and high ranking.” -CJ Powers

Me, myself, and I.

In a world of social media, how can you tell if someone is hurting? Sometimes you have to dig deeper and stop to wonder if you’re loving your neighbor.

“Very nice image and thoughtful premise.  Could have given him a little more head room in the framing.  All in all, I thought there should have been more cards and that the stakes could have been higher-that the character could have been going through worse stuff.” -Richard Ramsey
“Gorgeous production value (Look! Someone actually lit a scene!). Great performance and perfect timing on the cards.” -Evan Derrick
“Performance is solid but the tone is muddled. Is this funny? Somber? Sad? Ironic? Well constructed shot but hard to score high with the single shot. Editing points for the subtle color work.” -Ash Greyson
“Creating a contrasting subplot using the cards was brilliant and highly commendable. Changing the coloration from warm tones to cool tones as the warmth of his personality cooled worked well. The over all simplicity of the production forced the viewer to pay closer attention to the story elements and made for an intimate expression of feelings that the viewer received. You were able to touch the heart of the audience.

So, with such great words about your production, you are probably trying to figure out why you ended up in third place rather than first. Well, it’s my guess that the varied approaches of each judge made the difference. Consider the fact that the judges had to each determine how to rate a film with a locked down camera against ones with incredible camera moves, artistic lighting or in camera effects.

Add to it a consideration of how to rate the editing of a fast cut adventure against a film with only one or two cuts. And, what about adding in special effects or coloring into the elements that make up the editing score? In other words, had a viewpoint been a touch different, your film may have qualified for first place. That’s how close the competition was.

Professionally speaking, you can be proud of your work and add this film to your reel. In fact, I know two producers who will want to watch it and they very well might add your name to the crew list for their next production. You definitely have a great future in store for you. Now let’s see if you have what it takes to make something that is more complex.” -CJ Powers

Cast:
Allen - Tyler Roberds

Crew:
Writer/Director/Producer - Ryan Dunlap
Writer/Assistant Director - Dustin Ballard
Director of Photography - Bob Dodd
Cat Wrangler - Austin Penick
Grips - Christopher Akers, Lee Boccacci, Joseph Hutson

Christmas Eve, little Johnny decides to open his presents early, knowing little of the consequence that will follow.

“Very nicely done.  It’s very difficult to create a clear and resolved story within a minute and you did it.  Some of the shots were a little dim, but all were nicely framed.  You stopped using audio after he tore threw the boxes.  Kind of wanted to hear some more audio as the kid destroyed cars and lincoln logs.  Also would have helped sell the kid’s performance if there would have been some vocals.  Overall, fantastic job!” -Richard Ramsey
“Music made it more creepy than it should have been. Nice angles and a variety of set-ups. Maybe should have started on a calendar to let the audience know he shouldn’t be opening gifts? A little unclear if it was him opening presents early or opening everyone else’s presents.” -Ash Greyson
“This film worked very well on several levels and has the potential for distribution. However, I was concerned that the final point was made about the big man, rather than about a clear moral choice. This slight change would make a significant difference in the film’s revenue stream and should be considered. I’d also consider bringing up the light levels a tad to help those venues that aren’t able to project the film void of external lights interfering.

By bringing up the light levels you might avoid the partially psycho aspect to the film and make it more presentable to multiple types of audiences. The scissors, snake and shadow-draped Santa may otherwise be too freaky or scary for younger kids – After all, it creeped out one of the judges.

If you’re willing to make a few changes, I’d like to talk to you about markets and distribution. There is a new company starting up next month that will be distributing shorts and creating opportunity for filmmakers to see some cashflow. Let me know.” -CJ Powers

Directors - Justin Cardoza, Matt Soriano, Kelsey Shryer
Actors - Andrew Carson & Mark Jenkins

Making friends the Facebook way isn’t always the best approach.

“Great job!  It looks really nice.  The shots are nice and varied.  Lighting was well done.  Also, nice to see shallow depth of field.  The performances are very good.  I think there should have been music throughout. I also think that in the peep-hole shots it looked more like Ryan was trying to make weird faces than he was trying to actually communicate with the resident.  Also, the two actors look a lot a like, which isn’t that big of a deal, but it leads me to believe their related, which is hindering the suspension of disbelief.  I think the sketch is a really good idea and if expanded with jokes that gradually build into a satisfying climax it could be very successful as a viral video.” -Richard Ramsey
“Fun, but even if unintentional, too derivative of a popular viral video. Home owner not as convincing as friend requester. Maybe some music? Could have had a better payoff, maybe a 3rd party eradicated the “spam” or “virus”.” -Ash Greyson
“I laughed out loud with this film and was perplexed by those watching it with me that didn’t even crack a smile. They just didn’t get it. The irony was strong and the production values high, but one important ingredient was missing that would have significantly improved your score. None of us understood the point of why we were watching the film. It was just funny – or weird for those who didn’t get it.

The greatest thing that irony allows us to do with an audience is change the way they perceive or think about things. You had that opportunity, but you didn’t bring it home. Let me put it in a form of a question. What was the point of the story? What was the thought you wanted the audience to walk away with?

I hope it wasn’t just, “Wow, I didn’t realize how absurd Facebook was.” While its good to bring awareness to the audience, it’s better to give them a hint, as to how to think going forward. The thing that would have strengthened the film would have been a message about how to make real friends, not ones you can just click away. In fact, why didn’t the wiser man realize what was happening, lift his hand, flick his finger and say, “click, I de-friended you”. The next shot would be the FB guy falling backwards and going nuts as he takes on an electronic type of rejection. Just a thought.

I hope you understand my point is to help you see that the message needs to be completed. The current version of your film just brings awareness and doesn’t set up the idea of what a real friend looks like or the irony of an electronic rejection. Either way, the story gives the audience something to go by.

Keep up the great work and think your short stories through to some form of resolving ending to bring your message home for the audience.” -CJ Powers

Cast:
Tim - Ryan Dunlap
Gary - Christopher Akers

Crew
Director - Dustin Ballard
Written by Dustin Ballard and Ryan Dunlap
Producer - Ryan Dunlap
Camera Op - Joseph Hutson
DP & Sound - Bob Dodd
Script Supervisor - Lee Boccacci
Grips - Austin Penick
BTS - Tyler Roberds

A commercial for The Learning Institute.

(Note: Started YouTube process at 6:50 PM Mtn Standard Time - slow delay…)

“The film looks very nice.  Love the colors and the depth of field.  Nice moving shot at the beginning.  I think some of the close-ups could have been closer.  Also, I think the voices would have sold better if there had been some room tone and foley for the scribbling markers and the actors shifting clothes and swinging feet.” -Richard Ramsey
“This submission looks so sharp and was so well executed (the lip syncing is spot-on) that I was very disappointed it was in service to a mock commercial.This would have made a fantastic 1 min. skit with a story and/or punchline.” -Evan Derrick
“Great cinematography and lighting. Would have worked better with the kids voice as inner monologue instead of trying to match the mouths.” -Ash Greyson
“The ADR was a great idea - the concept of the video came off a bit more offensive than funny.” -Logan Sekulow
“Great acting. The talent did very well taking on the aura of the little kids. I loved the visual style, as it focused me into the personalities of the characters – A rarity and well appreciated. There are other great things I saw in this picture, but to save time, suffice it to say the direction in this film was smart.

Most short films have a lot of great elements, but they lack good directing. And, I’ve noticed that many times people can’t tell where great story and acting ends and where directing makes the difference. In fact, I’d venture to say the vast majority of the entrants don’t have a clue what it takes to be a great director versus a good director. However, in this film, the directing was wonderful or you got really lucky several times during your production.

Now, concerning the film being award winning or not, to rise to the top you would have to go back to a few frames and alter the lips to better synchronize the dialog. You could use After Effects so you wouldn’t have to bring the actors back in.

I also need to take a moment and share how good the story was and how well it could impact parents. Those with teenagers are always perplexed when their youth act like little kids and proud when they act like adults. The irony in your production is easily related to parents struggling with their kids needing to grow up. Therefore if you could interview some parents that have endured and overcome this type of struggle and find out what was key to their success, you could integrate it into your message and change the lives of millions of parents around the nation.

If I were you, I’d give it a shot. And, let me know when it’s done and I’ll help you get it into the market if you don’t already have another source to help you.” -CJ Powers

Directed and Produced by Joel Jost. Actors: Joel Jost, Emily Jost & Josiah Jost. Voice talents: Judah Jost, Hannah-Grace Jost & Amy-Joy Jost

Frankie’s had it up to here with people and their moaning around the holidays.  He’s taken it upon himself to put out a public—er, puppet—service announcement to show people how blessed they really are.

“Funny and very clever.  Very good comic timing on the puppet’s delivery.  Opening shot was a little awkward.  The pan up the windows toward the end had an odd auto adjust from dark to light.  Should have had music throughout.  It needed some kind of button or pay off at the end.  It doesn’t seem to escalate to a climax or satisfactory conclusion.” -Richard Ramsey
“Great, original idea, but even more impressive is the fact that you pulled it off. Excellent performance.” -Evan Derrick
“Huge bonus for using a puppet, cute message and lots of locations. Music could have gone on the entire time.” -Ash Greyson
“When your film started off I thought I was in for one of those stupid skit type films and was pleasantly surprised by your story, camera work and puppetry. Your comedic bing-bing-boom pattern had an extra bing, but the third bing was so short that I didn’t think it detracted from your boom. Having the visualization of the puppet lying on the bed created a great laugh-out-loud pay-off for the audience.

The camera movement to the second floor was a great touch, but also disappointing for me due to the poor lighting conditions that detracted from the story. Your puppeteering was exceptional and quickly exceeded the acting of others in your film. Keep in mind that you always want supporting actors that enhance your main character, not take away from him.

Your humor and puppeteering is worth further exploration. I would suggest you introduce yourself to Phil Vischer and check out what he is doing at jellytelly.com. I’ll also keep you in mind when I’m ready to shoot My Professor’s Study, which uses puppets combined with animation and live action – Currently in development.” -CJ Powers

Nathan Mancini, Connor Walsh, Mike McOrmond

A young man suddenly discovers a strange switch which radically alters the world around him.  Startled by this new reality he attempts to document and share his new discovery.

“I thought your shots were very nice.  Images were very high quality and there was effective color grading in the non-b&w shots.  It also had a good pace to it and you showed a talent for visual storytelling.  While I did like the idea that characters in that world were amazed at or skeptical of something that we take for granted (a multicolored world), the entire story is centered around an effect that isn’t very difficult to pull off and so was kind of much ado about nothing.  The performances were good and believable in the context of the story.” -Richard Ramsey
“Excellent production value here all around. However, it is unclear why 1) the world is in black and white to begin with; 2) why touching the wall changes it to color; and 3) why this is a big deal. I understand that the 1 min. time frame is fairly restrictive, but simplifying your concept would have gone a long way. A bit too ambitious for 60 seconds.” -Evan Derrick
“Sense of mystery and creepiness that the music created never pays off. Why did he take the picture then not remember it? Great shot construction solid editing.” -Ash Greyson
“There was an excellent filmmaker like you that participated in another festival I judged. He was just as excellent in his craft as you demonstrated. He had one simple problem he didn’t know how to fix, which was revealed in one judges comment about his film, “So what.”

Those words seemed harsh to me when I heard it, but I can’t help but wonder if you had wished you heard those words before this competition. Here you are with great talent, but you gave little to the audience in the area of a meaningful message. Oh, you took the audience on a curious adventure and allowed them to explore what the character was doing, but you didn’t give them a pay-off. They aren’t sure why they just spent their time watching your film, but they are clear on the fact that you have talent.

I would instantly hire you to head up my second unit because of your skills, but without a pay-off, I would be hard pressed to consider you for the first unit. I hope that the competition clock didn’t allow you to complete the creative process for a pay-off or that you chose to leave things open ended for the audience to determine their own message, but I would have preferred you share a story about truth eventually coming out or standing firm on what is right even when the proof alludes us – There is the irony and the pulse of your story.

Filmmaking is the greatest of all art forms and puts into the hands of the filmmaker the power to invoke change of thought. There is no other tool on earth with the power to change culture than film. Even Jesus shared stories with the masses. I mean think about it, Jesus had four years in ministry to put into motion his kingdom on earth and he chose stories as his primary tool.

Your craft is well accomplished, no argument there. Now give the audience a reason to watch your films. Pull from the depth of your heart a message that plays well on the screen and become one of the greatest filmmakers of our time. It is in you.” -CJ Powers

Director/Writer:  Stephen Bunch
Producer: Matthew Jimmink
Cinematographer: Joshua Jimmink

Starring:
        Joel Pederson
        Brielle Jimmink

Editing:
      Nathan LeMaster
      Micah Neidhart

Lights: Rick Jimmink

Continuity:
        Lydia Neidhart

Make-Up/Costume and Set Designer:
        Neeva Pederson

Special Thanks to the Pederson Family.

A little girl wishes for her parents to stop fighting and get along.

“Nice images and use of black and white juxtaposed against the yellow smiles.  Argument (in writing and performance) lacked believable intensity.” -Richard Ramsey
“Cute little girl, more ECUs on her eyes, etc. would have sold emotion better. Would have liked the music to shift gears a few times to help tell the story more clearly.” -Ash Greyson
“Care must be given when a story is based on a gimmick and a cute kid. Sure, it will grab everyone’s attention, but it puts the filmmaker into a position where they have to make sure neither detracts from the message by placing the audiences’ attention on everything but the story.

Pacing also becomes a factor, as the audience will soon get over the initial visual impact. Suddenly they come to their senses and wonder what the argument is all about, but is it real or did the filmmaker assume no one would really pay attention to it, especially since it was off in a muddled and distant blur.

Without the understanding of the type of argument, the little girl almost becomes self-serving and manipulative or controlling of her parents. I can’t help but wonder if a new message emerges that the filmmaker hadn’t considered. I’ve learned in life that no child can control an emotionally healthy parent, so then, which message did the filmmaker want to leave with the audience?

Had the message been crystal clear, I’m confident it would have risen to the top three films. Regardless of the clarity, it was a great family project. I’ll never forget the first time I introduced my kids into filmmaking and to think that your efforts ended in the top ten, wow.

Keep up the great work. I will be looking forward to watching the first House feature film in the near future. And remember to take the time necessary to make sure you’re only telling the message you want to tell.” -CJ Powers

Lisa House
Zoe House
Kyla House
Korben House

No matter where you run, you cannot escape God.

“Nice images and pacing. Good with the hand-held style and transitions.  Your audio sounded nice. I didn’t find the story particularly believable…or convincing rather-specifically, that a hardened, or at least angst-ridden, skeptic would convert because he went for a jog.  I encourage you to take your visual talents and see if you can apply them to a story that is more challenging dramatically.” -Richard Ramsey
“Again, wonderful production values, but not a real story.” -Evan Derrick
“Nice handheld work, watch overexposing the skin. Story is a little too insular, tighter shot on the opening “I do not believe” would have sold it better in the end. Some movements with the music would have helped develop the story as well.” -Ash Greyson
“Making it to the top ten is a great feeling and yet, you may be wondering what you could have done to be in the top three. As best as I can tell, the greatest distractions from your important story were overexposure (not the artistic kind), digital fragments (never present in an award winning film) and a few other technical issues.

The story itself had important merit, but was sometimes lost in the artistic choices made. I wasn’t able to appreciate the juxtaposition of the voice and music being at half the pace of the visuals (both camera movement and running). It made me uncomfortable, loosing my focus from the point of the message.

While each of these comments might seem petty, award winning films take care of every little detail they can to enhance the message. You are a good solid filmmaker who will be at the top one day, especially if you focus on the subtle details in story and craft. Congratulations on making the top ten.” -CJ Powers

Geno DiMaria
Dominic DiMaria

This story is of a thief who almost stole a families Christmas gifts. But it turns out he found the true meaning of Christmas through a little girl; Love. 

Elements Included:
cold breath
candy
hug
“I don’t believe . . .”

“I know night-shoots are much more challenging than day-shoots, but it was too hard to believe that this burglar would strike at noon (and why wear black to do so?).  In fact, it would have been difficult to tell it was a burglar had I not read the summary.  The burglar seems to be taking too much time to steal -especially in broad daylight.  He should be shoving things in the bag as fast as he can.  The initial premise of the story is touching (though slightly derivative of the Grinch).The child actress was good, but that character’s decision to offer the candy seems to have been made before she appeared on screen. She could have had at least a brief moment where she realized a stranger was in her house, and then made the decision to offer the candy. The lady doing laundry was believable-though her intro (dialogue-wise) was abrupt.  You had nice framing on many of your shots and the track toward the Bible was nicely done.” -Richard Ramsey
“Would have worked better if it had been at night and the little girl had mistaken the robber for Santa Claus. It is difficult to believe that a little girl would be so welcoming to a stranger in the middle of the day. Still, a sweet story.” -Evan Derrick
“Abrupt open and close. Good job by the little girl, watch eyelines and geography.” -Ash Greyson
“There are numerous things I can share to help you improve your filmmaking skills, but the most important lesson is for you to view your audience as more intelligent than you currently do. While I know you didn’t intend to insult them, the audience already got the point of your message before you pulled out the Bible and figuratively hit them over the head with it. The story would have been 10X stronger had you faded to black as the thief set the DVDs down.

A few other quick thoughts….

- Focus on continuity.
- When using a little cutie, always give her more screen time and extreme close-ups.
- Make sure your story plays out in a plausible manner (research parent’s reactions, child care habits, thief target selections, etc.).
- Have your actors visualize their feelings whenever possible.” -CJ Powers

Lance Duvall
Ben Williams

A young girl sits and stares. filling her life with as many things as she can to fill the void in her heart. What would happen if someone would take the time and listen and tell her the GOOD news!

“Beautiful images.  Well framed and lit.  Nice use of color, imagery, and music, (and even title fonts) to convey mood and style.  I think there could have been a stronger visual allusion to how the gospel was going to be shared with this girl-in the context of an actual relationship.  A clean cut kid showing up at the door with a Bible in tow seemed too non-relational (and too Mormon).  I would encourage the filmmakers to take on a greater challenge in terms of story and performance.  I understand the desire to play to one’s strength and the time limit is…well…limiting, but it would be nice to see you take your talent and skills for conveying visuals and apply them to material that is more challenging dramatically.” -Richard Ramsey
“Wonderful production value, but no story to speak of.” -Evan Derrick
“Love the handheld stuff, great use of long lens. A little too commercial-ish.” -Ash Greyson
“I saw in your work the beginnings of a great filmmaker. You have the sense of artistic expression, the organization of a producer, and the ability to tell story. The only reason your score wasn’t higher, was due to the level of impact your story made on the judges. This has nothing to do with how it might impact your peers.

However, I’d like you to consider a slightly different perspective. How much more powerful would the story be if it was in first person – Just changing out the narration with a female voice, the girl’s. What if she said, “I am out here.  I am sad. I am alone. My heart longs for the truth. If you don’t believe me, just look in my eyes. I know that this world isn’t empty, there is something out there. Something more. But if you don’t tell me, who will… etc.

By having a male voice and showing a male with a Bible, the story tends to feel more like an arrogant Christian boy is going out to get another notch on his belt. By shifting to a first person narrative, you personalize the message and ask the viewer to make their own decision of if you are worth them sharing the truth with. It becomes a decision on the viewer’s part that demands an internal answer, defining who they are – The film becomes award winning.  Just a thought for your consideration.

Keep making films. You have a lot on your heart that needs to come out.” -CJ Powers

Jamice Ivie ( cinematographer, Director and Writer )

Jordyn Ivie ( Actress )

Matthew Morgan ( Music ’ Mystery ’ )

A little boy can’t wait to open his present from Grandma!

“I commend you for having a clear story that was clearly executed.  Opening font looked a little on the cheap side-I think it was the plain green background.  The same font could have looked really nice if superimposed over a close up of some lit Christmas tree branches.  I liked the opening point of view shot. I thought Bill gave a good performance.  His choices-such as the decision to open the presents; to make sure no one was looking-were clearly presented and he had a nice reaction at the end when he got busted.  I thought there should have been more close-ups. Every shot seemed to be some variation of wide with a some interspersed medium shots.  At one point, you cut from a wide to another wide that was slightly left of the previous . I think you should have just panned the camera left or cut to a completely new framing.  I have mixed feelings about the ending pay-off. I’m glad that there was a pay-off and that he got caught in a unique, unexpected way…buuuut, I thought the verse was too heavy handed and, to be honest, a little too dark in the context of a kid at Christmas.” -Richard Ramsey
“Missed seeing the other characters.” -Ash Greyson
“Your film was a fun little piece with a nice touch at the end. I always enjoy a good Macaulay Culkin type comedy.

Your production came across like it was edited in the camera, with the actor carefully posing in key positions long enough for you to move the eqwuipment. To break this affect, you would do well to shoot additional coverage to be used in between the key points of action. You also might consider helping the actor to know what happens before and after each moment in his emotions and mind. This would free your art from the choppiness that seems to be prevalent.” -CJ Powers

Written by Betsy Clemons
Filmed by Joe Clemons
Starring Bill Clemons
Music by Sam Clemons
General Assistance by Leila Clemons

Have you gone into debt by giving into your children’s demands? The Magic Word can help. This revolutionary, innovative program will teach you how to take back control of your family.
This video is a spoof of serious infomercials.

“Funny idea for a commercial.  I really like that you never actually say what “the magic word” is.  Obviously, there are some sound issues.  It seems your downwind in your nature shots.  And, I didn’t really understand why the spokesman was out on a creek anyway.  I thought he should have been in the store or in the presence of someone who needed the “magic word.”  I thought the pace could have been tightened up.  For example, before the fam is interviewed on the porch, there’s a second or so of unnecessary dead space, and, in a one minute video, every second counts.  Some of the framing was akward (too much “headroom” etc).  Perhaps that was a deliberate choice to mimic a certain style of infomercial.  If so, the choice could have been clearer.” -Richard Ramsey
“I realize part of the humo” -Evan Derrick
“Story not clear, tighter edits needed to sell that it is a commercial, rough sound at times.” -Ash Greyson
“This type of humor is really tricky to risk in a festival. The judges typically either love it or hate it. There is one factor that helps the judges select which side of the fence they will land on and that is the quality of the craft, or lack of it. With your most important scene (the opening) being filled with a dreary look and bad sound, you quickly pointed the judges in the wrong direction. Ironically, you then followed the poor scene with better cinematography and sound, proving you could have done it in the first scene.

Excellence can only be achieved if every element you put in place excels. I can’t help but wonder how much higher your score would have climbed if you re-shot your host scenes. After all, the subtlety in revealing the magic word was excellent. As for the acting, it would have served you better to have found more experienced actors or done more takes to capture more natural expressions.” -CJ Powers

Brock Haroldson, Rick Holets, Ryan Holets, Andy Holets, Caleb Holets, Sierra Haroldson, Dennis Haroldson, Tracy Haroldson, Kelsey Haroldson, Emma Holets

Two eggs celebrate New Years Eve in Times Square.

“I like to see that you were thinking outside the box when you made this video. I enjoyed whatever puppetry was required to move the eggs along.  It would have been nice to have seen more extras (or their feet at least), but I understand that’s challenging.  I thought the pay-off was too predictable.  Obviously an egg is going to get squashed.  I liked that you used ambient city noise, but it didn’t blend well with the egg voice-overs, which did not seem to be recorded well.” -Richard Ramsey
“Clever, simple idea that was well executed.Great punchline.” -Evan Derrick
“Needed a sense of story, the payoff wasn’t big enough. VO needed better direction. Would have liked to see some animation on the faces of the eggs. Better writing in VO would have helped, maybe some egg puns? When you have 60 sec don’t waste any time with credits.” -Ash Greyson
“It’s difficult to use inanimate objects as characters, unless there is a significant twist in the story or tear jerking punch attached. The only twist I saw in your story was that the demise of the egg was what looked like an exercise ball rather than the expected shoe crushing the egg. This isn’t endearing to an audience and doesn’t turn your high concept into a successful story.

You clearly have a handle on your craft and can think creatively, so I would hope you’d take the extra time needed to create a personal experiential message for the viewer – Giving life and believability to your characters. In other words, finding a way to put more emotion into the characters and creating an unexpected moment that makes a point – Look to irony for your solution. Give your story heart and a reason for the audience to care.” -CJ Powers

David Reid
Rick Reid
Kristin Reid
Steven Reid
Christopher Reid
Samuel Reid
Katia Reid

This is a brief, (very brief) documentary about William Tyndale, the translator of the English Bible.

“Obviously, there are some sound issues.  Many lines were hard to hear.  I think the pictures could have been presented more effectively.  For example, if they could track forward or backward or were large enough to take up the entire frame.” -Richard Ramsey
“Documentary is probably not be the best format to choose for a 1 minute contest. Regardless, in order to pull a documentary off at all you need good sound. Poor sound will cripple any documentary.” -Evan Derrick
“Appreciate the effort to do a documentary but the lack of production (especially sound) made it too rough to appreciate.” -Ash Greyson
“This appears to be the filmmaker’s first film. It has the quality content most expect in a documentary with poorly executed production techniques. Unfortunately, the technical problems hindered the telling of the story, limiting what the audience could gain from it. While this might discourage most, this filmmaker should consider teaming with another experienced filmmaker to re-shoot the project, as the story is worth telling. The filmmaker’s knowledge and organizational skills will make her a great producer in years to come.” -CJ Powers

Katie Daniels - Camera, Editing, Directing, Performance
Andrew Daniels - Camera, Performance
Laura Daniels - Performance
Bethany Daniels - Camera

This year, think outside the box and give her a gift that she will always remember.  Visit us online at http://www.FruityJewels.com

“I like the quirkiness of the concept, execution, and performances.  The line, “What is it?” seemed odd.  It’s clearly an apple.  Then again, it’s an odd premise.  The close-ups could have been a little more straight on framing wise.  At one point, the actress eyes are hidden by the side-bars on her glasses.  Also, the scene is really dimly lit.  Glad you used graphics, but the x flashing over the box goes on too long.  Cut to something else.” -Richard Ramsey
“Clever idea, needs better lighting, liked the nerdy guy, better graphics at the end would have sold it more as would have a more “commercial” sounding VO.” -Ash Greyson
“Creating a Saturday Night Live type sketch for a short film forces the judges to compare your work to some of the best comedians in the world. This coupled with poor lighting and other technical problems, drops the film’s potential away from the winner’s circle.

While your comedic timing and concept were funny, you might want to work with your comedians to make sure every take is on the money. I’d also suggest improving your production values, so as to not detract from the humor. All elements have to work together to be successful, including the purchasing of the URL and displaying more humor for the judges to appreciate. Yes, I did attempt to go to the sight, after all, we are in the decade of interactive story telling. Interactivity is the future and that’s why I’m giving you feedback ” -CJ Powers

No matter where you run, you cannot escape God.

“Nice images and pacing. Good with the hand-held style and transitions.  Your audio sounded nice. I didn’t find the story particularly believable…or convincing rather-specifically, that a hardened, or at least angst-ridden, skeptic would convert because he went for a jog.  I encourage you to take your visual talents and see if you can apply them to a story that is more challenging dramatically.” -Richard Ramsey
“Again, wonderful production values, but not a real story.” -Evan Derrick
“Nice handheld work, watch overexposing the skin. Story is a little too insular, tighter shot on the opening “I do not believe” would have sold it better in the end. Some movements with the music would have helped develop the story as well.” -Ash Greyson
“Making it to the top ten is a great feeling and yet, you may be wondering what you could have done to be in the top three. As best as I can tell, the greatest distractions from your important story were overexposure (not the artistic kind), digital fragments (never present in an award winning film) and a few other technical issues.

The story itself had important merit, but was sometimes lost in the artistic choices made. I wasn’t able to appreciate the juxtaposition of the voice and music being at half the pace of the visuals (both camera movement and running). It made me uncomfortable, loosing my focus from the point of the message.

While each of these comments might seem petty, award winning films take care of every little detail they can to enhance the message. You are a good solid filmmaker who will be at the top one day, especially if you focus on the subtle details in story and craft. Congratulations on making the top ten.” -CJ Powers

Geno DiMaria
Dominic DiMaria

Every wonder what would happen if you house was burglarized Christmas eve?  Let Home Security protect your future from instances like this or find yourself a good wife to cover it all up.

“Very funny.  Laughed out loud at the quirky, exaggerated (yet still occasionally subtle) performances.  Thought there could have perhaps been more business at the beginning with getting ready.  Thought the character’s wake-up moment was a little predictable.  Love the POV shot down the stairs and the interchange between husband and wife when he points out all the things that are missing or “new.”  Great performances.” -Richard Ramsey
“Great production value all around (loved the shot going down the stairs with the fuzzy ball in the frame). However, I watched it twice and I still didn’t understand it. Reading the summary made the story clear, but neither the fact that 1)  they had been burglarized or 2) the wife was trying to cover it up was clear within the film itself.” -Evan Derrick
“Love the POV shot with the hat, well edited. Very good performances. Not sure the payoff is clear, should be more obvious they were robbed, first time thru, thought maybe the wife was just a grinch or had sold everything, etc.” -Ash Greyson
“Congratulations on the big win!

Since the excitement will soon fade over the next few weeks, I wanted to share a few thoughts to prepare you for making even better films. First let me share that you clearly have a lot of good things happening in your list of abilities and the successful team you pulled together. Second, there are a couple areas where you have room for improvement – The most important is story.

Many filmmakers make the films they want to make with no concern for their audience. For instance, if you’re a home schooler who got into film, you can probably make shows ideal for that market without much thought. However, if you want to reach the world with your message, consideration must be given to multiple market segments, some of which you may detest.

When I create a universal story that can cross markets, I start with the end in mind – The message I want the audience talking about as they leave the theater. I then tie to the message a benefit for each market segment that I want to reach. That benefit is then tied to a character within the film that represents the market. The main character can then touch that life in such a way as to direct the character to make the right kind of decisions regardless of his or her upbringing. In other words, by influencing the supporting characters, you can influence the audience segment.

Your story started to allude to a secondary segment, but it wasn’t brought out fully. This leads me to believe you have the capability of getting to the next level of success by making films that are received well by multiple market segments. Financially, this will make for a nice future and spiritually, you’ll be able to impact many lives with your messages.” -CJ Powers

Matt Blick
Tim Miller
Christina Wallace
J. Scranton

This comedy is about a man who’s headache drives him to extreme measures.

“Great story idea.  But, I think there were some unclear moments.  On first viewing, it’s not clear who is opening up the medicine cabinet or who is making the phone call.  It probably seems that pajamas should be enough of a give away, but they weren’t.  I think the shot where “pajama guy” runs out of the house could have looked like more he had just missed him by panning from the house door to the back of the car traveling (much faster) completely away from the camera (rather than very slowly to the left of the frame).  Right now, it looks like he could very easily catch him.  Really enjoyed the shots of him running through the snow.  Thought the pay off was great, but would have liked to have seen the driver’s reaction before cutting wide to reveal the Walgreens.” -Richard Ramsey
“Main character needed more motivation for wanting to chase him down than just wanting an aspirin. Needed a beat at the end. Loved the opening shot. Sound mix was rough.” -Ash Greyson
“Comedic adventure films require creative camera work, incredible timing and the bing-bing-boom set-up & pay-off. Your film had several interesting camera shots including your important opening shot and the ride-a-long you gave the audience with your sled.

The timing needed some work as the last shot should have been on the screen for at least 3 seconds to give the audience enough time to receive your final punch line. Cutting time out of a different portion of the film and giving a healthy 3 – 5 seconds for the audience to realize he was at the drugstore would have strengthened the comedy elements.

The bing-bing-boom set-up and pay-off works every time, but most filmmakers try adding an additional bing into the mix. In case you’re not familiar with the term, the bing represents the moment or the pattern that sets up the twist or the punch line to the humor. When additional creative ideas increase the number, it reduces the amount of humor received by the audience.

In your case you had the cell phone – running and slipping in the snow – sledding and landing in the snow pile – and the tapping on the window with the drugstore reveal. I would have suggested dropping the falling segment and doing a pull back with the camera during the window tap to the reveal. This would have given you the extra time for the audience at the end and driven to the punch line more effectively.

I would also encourage you to continue developing your craft skills.” -CJ Powers

Written by David Dykstra and Ben Kayser
Directed by Ben Kayser and Seth Dykstra
Cinematographer: Seth Dykstra

In a world of social media, how can you tell if someone is hurting? Sometimes you have to dig deeper and stop to wonder if you’re loving your neighbor.

“Very nice image and thoughtful premise.  Could have given him a little more head room in the framing.  All in all, I thought there should have been more cards and that the stakes could have been higher-that the character could have been going through worse stuff.” -Richard Ramsey
“Gorgeous production value (Look! Someone actually lit a scene!). Great performance and perfect timing on the cards.” -Evan Derrick
“Performance is solid but the tone is muddled. Is this funny? Somber? Sad? Ironic? Well constructed shot but hard to score high with the single shot. Editing points for the subtle color work.” -Ash Greyson
“Creating a contrasting subplot using the cards was brilliant and highly commendable. Changing the coloration from warm tones to cool tones as the warmth of his personality cooled worked well. The over all simplicity of the production forced the viewer to pay closer attention to the story elements and made for an intimate expression of feelings that the viewer received. You were able to touch the heart of the audience.

So, with such great words about your production, you are probably trying to figure out why you ended up in third place rather than first. Well, it’s my guess that the varied approaches of each judge made the difference. Consider the fact that the judges had to each determine how to rate a film with a locked down camera against ones with incredible camera moves, artistic lighting or in camera effects.

Add to it a consideration of how to rate the editing of a fast cut adventure against a film with only one or two cuts. And, what about adding in special effects or coloring into the elements that make up the editing score? In other words, had a viewpoint been a touch different, your film may have qualified for first place. That’s how close the competition was.

Professionally speaking, you can be proud of your work and add this film to your reel. In fact, I know two producers who will want to watch it and they very well might add your name to the crew list for their next production. You definitely have a great future in store for you. Now let’s see if you have what it takes to make something that is more complex.” -CJ Powers

Cast:
Allen - Tyler Roberds

Crew:
Writer/Director/Producer - Ryan Dunlap
Writer/Assistant Director - Dustin Ballard
Director of Photography - Bob Dodd
Cat Wrangler - Austin Penick
Grips - Christopher Akers, Lee Boccacci, Joseph Hutson

With the impending New Year, a young man thinks back over the past year, wondering if he was a good steward of his time.

“The story was clearly conveyed in the sense that I got what you were trying to say (morally), but it was not clearly conveyed in what you actually did say dramatically and visually.  As a viewer, we have to assume that this character wastes time habitually rather than simply relaxing or procrastinating occasionally.  I also thought there was an odd juxtaposition between the deliberately over-acted comedy in the flashbacks and the character’s supposedly sobering epiphany.  It wasn’t convincing to me that this character would be swayed by a preacher on tv.” -Richard Ramsey
“Stuff shot in the past needed a different look. Raced to an end without enough revelation on the part of the main character. Idea was interesting.” -Ash Greyson
“There are a lot of right ideas in this film, but poor execution due mostly to the combining of comedic elements and dramatic elements. After decades of filmmaking, I have yet to find a film that equally and effectively combines both genres. So if the pros can’t seem to pull it off, I’m not sure taking that risk was worth the experiment.

Now with that said, I might be off base. It is possible that the serious segments were supposed to be tongue-in-cheek, but with dry humor accentuated with over the top slapstick type highlights. Again, sounds too complex for a pro to attempt.

Focusing on improving your craft and working out comedic details like the bing-bing-boom pattern to deliver a humorous punch line would be worth your focus. This film had an extra bing added and no boom or real pay-off, leaving this judge scratching his head.

However, I couldn’t help but notice the subtle string of depth you had in the film and wondered if producing an intense drama might better play to your strengths. It was enough for me to become curious. I’d like to see what you could do with it – Keeping in mind that you need to improve your craft.” -CJ Powers

Story by: Ken Lawrence
Featuring, Shot and Edited by: Zack Lawrence
Music from SmartSound Royalty Free Music Library

Frankie’s had it up to here with people and their moaning around the holidays.  He’s taken it upon himself to put out a public—er, puppet—service announcement to show people how blessed they really are.

“Funny and very clever.  Very good comic timing on the puppet’s delivery.  Opening shot was a little awkward.  The pan up the windows toward the end had an odd auto adjust from dark to light.  Should have had music throughout.  It needed some kind of button or pay off at the end.  It doesn’t seem to escalate to a climax or satisfactory conclusion.” -Richard Ramsey
“Great, original idea, but even more impressive is the fact that you pulled it off. Excellent performance.” -Evan Derrick
“Huge bonus for using a puppet, cute message and lots of locations. Music could have gone on the entire time.” -Ash Greyson
“When your film started off I thought I was in for one of those stupid skit type films and was pleasantly surprised by your story, camera work and puppetry. Your comedic bing-bing-boom pattern had an extra bing, but the third bing was so short that I didn’t think it detracted from your boom. Having the visualization of the puppet lying on the bed created a great laugh-out-loud pay-off for the audience.

The camera movement to the second floor was a great touch, but also disappointing for me due to the poor lighting conditions that detracted from the story. Your puppeteering was exceptional and quickly exceeded the acting of others in your film. Keep in mind that you always want supporting actors that enhance your main character, not take away from him.

Your humor and puppeteering is worth further exploration. I would suggest you introduce yourself to Phil Vischer and check out what he is doing at jellytelly.com. I’ll also keep you in mind when I’m ready to shoot My Professor’s Study, which uses puppets combined with animation and live action – Currently in development.” -CJ Powers

Nathan Mancini, Connor Walsh, Mike McOrmond

A late Christmas celebrator discovers his neighbors’ enthusiasm has been thrown out with the tree.

“Really enjoyed the fast pace and energetic performances.  Quite a few shots were crooked.  Didn’t like the last shot of the guy walking hand in hand with a little girl he just met.  I thought their candy cane exchange was enough of a shared moment between them.  She could have just departed after that.” -Richard Ramsey
“How did he miss Christmas? Why was everyone so upset? Nice cold breath.” -Ash Greyson
“This film reminded me of the style of humor used in Animal House. One thing I’ve learned about this style, is that it comes across poorly unless accompanied by very high production values. It’s one of those things that has the audience stumped at first. “Is this supposed to be funny or was the filmmaker on meds when he shot it?”

Since you had several humorous moments, it was clear that the humor was intended, but it was just as clear that the low production values lowered your score. You made good use of the bing-bing-boom comedic pattern, but stayed on the boom too long – get to the wreath over the head sooner. I would have suggested one shot for the pay-off instead of the four segments you used.

The little girl was a nice touch, but who in this day and age would give a stranger candy and what person would accept candy from a stranger? The lack of plausibility in your ending may have hampered the pay-off of your over all message. You don’t want a viewer to wonder about the candy or be concerned for the girl when you’re making an important point.

You effectively used a great story structure, put together a worthwhile message and brought some fun to the screen. It’s too bad that the lower production values diminished what the audience was able to receive. I recommend you focus on improving your craft and see if you can’t better get the irony residing in your head onto the screen with your next project.” -CJ Powers

Nate Eckerson
Ryan Eckerson
Emily Eckerson
Becky Eckerson
Amanda Flynn
Jeff Flynn
Hanneke Flynn
Josh Lueken
Jon Lueken
Patty Lueken
Roger Lueken
Emma Lueken

A young man suddenly discovers a strange switch which radically alters the world around him.  Startled by this new reality he attempts to document and share his new discovery.

“I thought your shots were very nice.  Images were very high quality and there was effective color grading in the non-b&w shots.  It also had a good pace to it and you showed a talent for visual storytelling.  While I did like the idea that characters in that world were amazed at or skeptical of something that we take for granted (a multicolored world), the entire story is centered around an effect that isn’t very difficult to pull off and so was kind of much ado about nothing.  The performances were good and believable in the context of the story.” -Richard Ramsey
“Excellent production value here all around. However, it is unclear why 1) the world is in black and white to begin with; 2) why touching the wall changes it to color; and 3) why this is a big deal. I understand that the 1 min. time frame is fairly restrictive, but simplifying your concept would have gone a long way. A bit too ambitious for 60 seconds.” -Evan Derrick
“Sense of mystery and creepiness that the music created never pays off. Why did he take the picture then not remember it? Great shot construction solid editing.” -Ash Greyson
“There was an excellent filmmaker like you that participated in another festival I judged. He was just as excellent in his craft as you demonstrated. He had one simple problem he didn’t know how to fix, which was revealed in one judges comment about his film, “So what.”

Those words seemed harsh to me when I heard it, but I can’t help but wonder if you had wished you heard those words before this competition. Here you are with great talent, but you gave little to the audience in the area of a meaningful message. Oh, you took the audience on a curious adventure and allowed them to explore what the character was doing, but you didn’t give them a pay-off. They aren’t sure why they just spent their time watching your film, but they are clear on the fact that you have talent.

I would instantly hire you to head up my second unit because of your skills, but without a pay-off, I would be hard pressed to consider you for the first unit. I hope that the competition clock didn’t allow you to complete the creative process for a pay-off or that you chose to leave things open ended for the audience to determine their own message, but I would have preferred you share a story about truth eventually coming out or standing firm on what is right even when the proof alludes us – There is the irony and the pulse of your story.

Filmmaking is the greatest of all art forms and puts into the hands of the filmmaker the power to invoke change of thought. There is no other tool on earth with the power to change culture than film. Even Jesus shared stories with the masses. I mean think about it, Jesus had four years in ministry to put into motion his kingdom on earth and he chose stories as his primary tool.

Your craft is well accomplished, no argument there. Now give the audience a reason to watch your films. Pull from the depth of your heart a message that plays well on the screen and become one of the greatest filmmakers of our time. It is in you.” -CJ Powers

Director/Writer:  Stephen Bunch
Producer: Matthew Jimmink
Cinematographer: Joshua Jimmink

Starring:
        Joel Pederson
        Brielle Jimmink

Editing:
      Nathan LeMaster
      Micah Neidhart

Lights: Rick Jimmink

Continuity:
        Lydia Neidhart

Make-Up/Costume and Set Designer:
        Neeva Pederson

Special Thanks to the Pederson Family.

This is a fictional story of what may happen in the future if we don’t stand up for our rights as Americans. The way we did the story was meant to be rather funny, and not too realistic, but, the fact remains that we could - in the near future - have our free speech rights taken away if we don’t act now! NOTE: Security element number 1 may be hard to spot - at 40 seconds the little boy sticks a candy in his mouth and keeps it there as the men pick him up.

“I think it was a good idea to do this as a news cast rather than a narrative.  However, the abductions look staged, whereas I think it would be better if they looked like actual real-time news footage.” -Richard Ramsey
“Nice use of cold breath. Good performance by main actress. Too verbose of a script, would have liked to see footage treated more like local news.” -Ash Greyson
“The production values were at a level of a beginning filmmaker and detracted from the more mature story elements and irony. It seems that your mental capabilities and artistic interpretation exceeds your craft or ability to execute. Unfortunately there is no quick fix, but to endure several more years of filmmaking to bring excellence to your production values.

However, I wouldn’t be too quick to mature your craft without considering multiple genres. You demonstrate both an ability to be good at hardcore news, but your vantage point on the ironic would be better served focusing on productions aimed at tweens. Since this is a new developing market, you have time to improve your skills and become a future player in the niche.

The bottom line, you have time on your side, so make sure you keep FUN in the equation.” -CJ Powers

The Kenney Family

A young adult asks the question “Is this all there is?” and is surprised by the answer. I’m just joking, he isn’t surprised, but he does find and answer.

“Your use of time lapse was fantastic and I credited that in your cinema and editing scores.  There’s not much there in the way of story and not very demanding from a performance standpoint.  I also thought you could have done better than the song lyric on black background.  That could have had a more compelling image.” -Richard Ramsey
“Excellent job with the timelapse, but I wish it had been in service to a genuine story rather than a character lesson.” -Evan Derrick
“Nice message but muddled story. GREAT use of timelapse, work it into the narrative better. Love the outside shot.” -Ash Greyson
“I was fascinated by the juxtaposition of your heartfelt story and visual effects. Not to mention the effort behind the production in order to keep the main character looking like he was at normal speed.

The problem with using a visual gimmick is that it limits what you can do. It forces you to stay in the box you created and everything including music selection and editing choices have to match the style of the gimmick or the picture will suffer. When used well, the gimmick can enhance a story, but the opposite is also true.

Mike Jittlov created the first live action pixilated story and did it in a way that allowed the gimmick to serve the short story. It got the attention of a major studio and I had the opportunity to chat with him on the phone while he was producing his feature by the same title. His biggest concern was having locked himself in a box that didn’t give him enough creative leeway for a 90 minute story. The feature was a flop.

If your story is strong enough to be told without a gimmick, then I recommend not using it unless it perfectly serves the point of your story. If it isn’t directly related to the point of the story, drop the idea and save it for another day.

Keep up the good work and make sure your story drives your ideas rather than the other way around.

Just for the fun of it, here is Mike’s short film….

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GoLhLn9hVkE” -CJ Powers

Greg Lammiman
Dallas Lammiman
Lammiman Family

A trailer for an unmade sci-fi/adventure film

“You obviously are into visual effects and show aptitude for them.  (I don’t know how to do lightsabers)  But, this video seemed like a sequence of effects shots with not real story behind them.  If there is a particular effect that you excel at, then great!  Find a story where that effect can be featured in an environment that makes sense.  For example, light sabers look okay on space stations and in the woods or some other natural environment, but not in a very modern bedroom.  Use the effects to serve a clear, cohesive story.” -Richard Ramsey
“Extra cinematography points for the SFX, but a trailer, sadly, is not a story.” -Evan Derrick
“Music is too epic for visuals, no solid story. Points for degree of difficulty on some of the post work but focus more on telling a story with the edit, not the fx.” -Ash Greyson
“This film seemed to be more about experimenting with a lot of visual effects than sharing a story. Unfortunately, the execution of the effects was not up to the caliber needed for a festival. Focus needs to be given to developing the craft skills and story elements that it takes to move and audience. The good news is that the ideas and taste will work well once the filmmaker develops further in his craft.” -CJ Powers

Jeffrey French
Joshua French
Matthew Presley
Kristen Carey
Vicki Carey
Benjamin Dawson
Jesse Beeghley
Steve & Kris French

Cultural expectations clash against Biblical manhood in the SANDWICH WARS.

Based on a story from Raising Real Men: Surviving, Teaching, and Appreciating Boys by Hal and Melanie Young. http://www.raisingrealmen.com (used by permission)

Music from a royalty-free Soundbooth CS3 Score.

“I like the premise and the inherent humor in it.  I think there are two few shots and the ones used are not particularly interesting and don’t communicate much story wise.  There should be a couple of back and forth close-ups on the women and some close-ups on the boys and their sandwiches being morphed into guns.” -Richard Ramsey
“ADR is obvious and distracting. Idea is solid but execution was lacking.” -Ash Greyson
“I wasn’t really looking for a position video - remember that some of your judges may have differences in opinions.” -Logan Sekulow
“The high concept was right on the money. It is a needed message and the twist in the plot with the banana was excellent. Unfortunately, the film’s low score was due to poor execution, low production values and a team made up of beginners. It’s too bad we all have to suffer through these early stages of filmmaking, but it is necessary to achieve greater things that are yet to come.

There are few people who have a grasp on story and how to structure it in a successful way, so don’t give up. Be patient until your craft catches up with your story insights.” -CJ Powers

Hal Young
Melanie Young
John Calvin Young
Caleb McLeod Young
Ellie Faggion
Matthew Young
Andrew Faggion
Samuel Young
David Young
Susannah Young
Katherine Young

A little girl wishes for her parents to stop fighting and get along.

“Nice images and use of black and white juxtaposed against the yellow smiles.  Argument (in writing and performance) lacked believable intensity.” -Richard Ramsey
“Cute little girl, more ECUs on her eyes, etc. would have sold emotion better. Would have liked the music to shift gears a few times to help tell the story more clearly.” -Ash Greyson
“Care must be given when a story is based on a gimmick and a cute kid. Sure, it will grab everyone’s attention, but it puts the filmmaker into a position where they have to make sure neither detracts from the message by placing the audiences’ attention on everything but the story.

Pacing also becomes a factor, as the audience will soon get over the initial visual impact. Suddenly they come to their senses and wonder what the argument is all about, but is it real or did the filmmaker assume no one would really pay attention to it, especially since it was off in a muddled and distant blur.

Without the understanding of the type of argument, the little girl almost becomes self-serving and manipulative or controlling of her parents. I can’t help but wonder if a new message emerges that the filmmaker hadn’t considered. I’ve learned in life that no child can control an emotionally healthy parent, so then, which message did the filmmaker want to leave with the audience?

Had the message been crystal clear, I’m confident it would have risen to the top three films. Regardless of the clarity, it was a great family project. I’ll never forget the first time I introduced my kids into filmmaking and to think that your efforts ended in the top ten, wow.

Keep up the great work. I will be looking forward to watching the first House feature film in the near future. And remember to take the time necessary to make sure you’re only telling the message you want to tell.” -CJ Powers

Lisa House
Zoe House
Kyla House
Korben House

A classic example of the phrase “pride goeth before the fall” as set in Minnesota hockey rink.

“NIce shots and color.  The performances were good given the limited demands of the script and story. The sound on the puck close ups was too loud.  Should have just used sound from another take (like the wider shots).  Music was a little to loud compared to the dialogue and ambience as well.  There was some lagging after the goal was made.  My biggest criticism is that the film’s title makes the film’s ending too predictable.  I found myself thinking, “wait for it…here it comes.”  The fall needs to be sudden and unexpected.  Right now, it’s telegraphed before it happens.” -Richard Ramsey
“Top notch visuals. The story, however, lacked substance, and seemed mostly to be an excuse to make a film on an ice rink. If you had pumped up the fall at the end to be more cartoonish and over-the-top - really milked the slapstick - that would have helped the punchline quite a bit.” -Evan Derrick
“Good look, good shots. Great first several shots to establish location. Music did not match. Fall should have paid off more, been bigger and maybe for a gallery of onlookers.” -Ash Greyson
“The camera team did a good job finding artistic angles and unique perspectives to draw the audience in and establish the flavor of the story. It’s too bad some of the shots were bumpy and out of focus. While most viewers might be accepting of those shots due to the nature of the action, the judges could not. The cinematography scores had to drop.

One of the most difficult things about competitions with a time constraint is placing “security elements” into a good story without it being obvious or distorting the story. The mother sharing candy with the little girl was perfectly placed and played well as the skater went past them. It was as simple as a set up and pay-off. The breath element, however, stuck out like a soar thumb and caused the audience to question why the shot was there – distracting them from the point of the story. This was contrasted with the hug element that not only advanced the story, but it revealed more about both characters involved. Had all three worked well, the film would have scored more points.

Speaking of points, the thing that reduced the story points most significantly was the fact that the stories message wasn’t clear to the viewer unless they had read the title of the film. It is important for films to be inclusive of the story elements without leaving any outside of the screening. Hoping that someone knows the title of the film so they can understand the message places too much of the story at risk. Your message should stay centrally focused during the film and aimed in a way that the audience can receive it without distraction.” -CJ Powers

Director/Writer
Brady Lundy

Camera
Paul Lundy/Corey Lundy/Brady Lundy

Actors
Brady Lundy/Kirby Lundy/Corey Lundy

Hebrews 13:2 NKJV
Do not forget to entertain strangers,
for by so doing some have unwittingly
entertained angels.

“Nice job, guys!  Great message and performances!  I think the last line should have been shot more from the front of the actor instead of profile.  It seemed that we saw more of the top of the girl’s head than her face.  Good that the angel effect was used quickly.  I think the titles at the end could have been better.  Maybe the Hebrews verse superimposed over the that vast Southwestern sky instead of the over the flaming reddish background matte.  Also, I think you could have chosen a location where people are more apt to be passing by-rather than out in the middle of nowhere.  But, good job.  I enjoyed watching!” -Richard Ramsey
“Music too epic for visuals. Cool premise.” -Ash Greyson
“Great concept – poor casting. Having teens or tweens playing adults in a movie wipes out any form of plausibility. While I’m not sure why people are accepting of kids playing adults in church plays, it falls flat and is unacceptable on the screen. Instead, the script needs to be rewritten according to the actor’s playable age range. The setting needs to be adjusted, since none of these kids would be alone out in a desert area. And frankly, I’ve never seen a kid carry enough money on him to be able to buy groceries for another kid without planning ahead.

Please understand that regardless of how cute the actors are or how good their acting may or may not be, the performance score will automatically drop due to the unrealistic interpretation of the characters. All parts need to be age specific.

The use of special effects falls into the same conditions of believability and plausibility as if it is another actor. If the quality of the effects drop its plausibility, then the film suffers. If the effects are far better than the actors, then it stands out to the point of distorting the audience’s ability to accept it within the world of reality you created to tell your story. Always make sure your effects match the actors’ performance ability.” -CJ Powers

Produced and Directed by: Kelsey Hoppman
Edited by: Joshua Hoppman
Cast:
Jeremiah, Mykaela, and

Some New Year’s Resolutions

“Liked the guy outside. No solid story here.” -Ash Greyson
“This film has the makings to be a good fun flick for the local youth group who may know and respect those in the film, but for those of us outside of the group, there isn’t a lot there for us. Grabbing a camera and shooting some funny concepts does not guarantee that the audience will care, even if some of the lines are funny.

Think of it this way, you don’t know me from Adam, but you had my attention for one minute. What message or emotion did you decide to bless me with during that minute? Did you give me a message that would encourage me? Did you give me a message that would change my thought to something more healthy? Did you touch my soul, encouraging me to touch the lives of others? You may never have the opportunity to speak into my life again, so did you plant a seed that will grow or squander the opportunity?

I know my comments sound too deep for a lighthearted film, but I sensed God wanted me to share these thoughts with you and I needed to obey. And yes, I’ll freely admit that sometimes it’s important to just plant the seed of joy into someone’s life. But I hope you’ll consider the possibility of impacting lives with your films.

Did you know that the average person impacts 200 people a year? Did you know that some people impact hundreds or thousands of people each year? And what if your video goes viral to millions?

The first short film I ever made was shown in a couple hundred churches. One day I received a letter from a small church going through a split because of family problems concerning teenagers. The pastor’s words expressed the despair and sadness that spilled out into the entire community over the issue. He then wrote about his last ditch attempt to resolve things by showing the entire congregation my first film. He was ecstatic. He shared how the film was a catalyst for healing and ended the split. When I read about how after the film families told each other that they loved them for the first time in months, I welled up with tears. I had no idea that my five-minute story would make a difference. Nor did I realize the responsibility I had with those five minutes.

The Kendrick brothers receive at least one story a day testifying to the impact their films have made in the lives of people they never met. You can bet that they take their 100 minutes of speaking into the lives of people they’ve never met seriously.” -CJ Powers

Josh Cisewski - Director, Actor
Matthew Dehn - Actor
Michael Dahlager - Actor
Matthew Dahlager - Actor
Luke Nelson - Camera, Actor
Kevin Kessler - Camera

Making friends the Facebook way isn’t always the best approach.

“Great job!  It looks really nice.  The shots are nice and varied.  Lighting was well done.  Also, nice to see shallow depth of field.  The performances are very good.  I think there should have been music throughout. I also think that in the peep-hole shots it looked more like Ryan was trying to make weird faces than he was trying to actually communicate with the resident.  Also, the two actors look a lot a like, which isn’t that big of a deal, but it leads me to believe their related, which is hindering the suspension of disbelief.  I think the sketch is a really good idea and if expanded with jokes that gradually build into a satisfying climax it could be very successful as a viral video.” -Richard Ramsey
“Fun, but even if unintentional, too derivative of a popular viral video. Home owner not as convincing as friend requester. Maybe some music? Could have had a better payoff, maybe a 3rd party eradicated the “spam” or “virus”.” -Ash Greyson
“I laughed out loud with this film and was perplexed by those watching it with me that didn’t even crack a smile. They just didn’t get it. The irony was strong and the production values high, but one important ingredient was missing that would have significantly improved your score. None of us understood the point of why we were watching the film. It was just funny – or weird for those who didn’t get it.

The greatest thing that irony allows us to do with an audience is change the way they perceive or think about things. You had that opportunity, but you didn’t bring it home. Let me put it in a form of a question. What was the point of the story? What was the thought you wanted the audience to walk away with?

I hope it wasn’t just, “Wow, I didn’t realize how absurd Facebook was.” While its good to bring awareness to the audience, it’s better to give them a hint, as to how to think going forward. The thing that would have strengthened the film would have been a message about how to make real friends, not ones you can just click away. In fact, why didn’t the wiser man realize what was happening, lift his hand, flick his finger and say, “click, I de-friended you”. The next shot would be the FB guy falling backwards and going nuts as he takes on an electronic type of rejection. Just a thought.

I hope you understand my point is to help you see that the message needs to be completed. The current version of your film just brings awareness and doesn’t set up the idea of what a real friend looks like or the irony of an electronic rejection. Either way, the story gives the audience something to go by.

Keep up the great work and think your short stories through to some form of resolving ending to bring your message home for the audience.” -CJ Powers

Cast:
Tim - Ryan Dunlap
Gary - Christopher Akers

Crew
Director - Dustin Ballard
Written by Dustin Ballard and Ryan Dunlap
Producer - Ryan Dunlap
Camera Op - Joseph Hutson
DP & Sound - Bob Dodd
Script Supervisor - Lee Boccacci
Grips - Austin Penick
BTS - Tyler Roberds

When a great snowfall covers much of South Dakota, will they resident’s joy grow cold when their plans are canceled or will joy warm up the place?

“It sounds like you did some ADR.  The dialogue needed to be mixed with some outside ambiance.” -Richard Ramsey
“ADR is distracting. Story is not developed. Should have seen people struggling, not just stuck awkwardly, then paid off with people having fun.” -Ash Greyson
“This film had me stumped more than the rest. It seemed to just be a goofy story with a thread of religion tossed in. It begs the question, “What is the definition of a Christian film?”

You had many technical problems including breaking the camera plane, poor sound and the actors not being able to maintain their characters. Your point was convoluted and I wasn’t sure if it was about having a great life due to a positive thankful heart or if a careless lifestyle brings about joy – ignorance is bliss. Regardless of the point, it was not executed effectively, but it was clear that the gang had a great time filming it and probably laughing at the local premiere.” -CJ Powers

For Heaven’s Sake! Productions

Written, directed and edited by Dan Stibral
Music composed and performed by Kristi Stibral

Starring in order of appearence
David Stibral
Jonathan Stibral
Micah, Mark and Malachi Graham
Beka Stibral
Sarah and Joshua Stibral
Mary Stibral
Santa Claus (Hannah Stibral)
Dan Stibral
Joeseph Stibral

Christmas Eve, little Johnny decides to open his presents early, knowing little of the consequence that will follow.

“Very nicely done.  It’s very difficult to create a clear and resolved story within a minute and you did it.  Some of the shots were a little dim, but all were nicely framed.  You stopped using audio after he tore threw the boxes.  Kind of wanted to hear some more audio as the kid destroyed cars and lincoln logs.  Also would have helped sell the kid’s performance if there would have been some vocals.  Overall, fantastic job!” -Richard Ramsey
“Music made it more creepy than it should have been. Nice angles and a variety of set-ups. Maybe should have started on a calendar to let the audience know he shouldn’t be opening gifts? A little unclear if it was him opening presents early or opening everyone else’s presents.” -Ash Greyson
“This film worked very well on several levels and has the potential for distribution. However, I was concerned that the final point was made about the big man, rather than about a clear moral choice. This slight change would make a significant difference in the film’s revenue stream and should be considered. I’d also consider bringing up the light levels a tad to help those venues that aren’t able to project the film void of external lights interfering.

By bringing up the light levels you might avoid the partially psycho aspect to the film and make it more presentable to multiple types of audiences. The scissors, snake and shadow-draped Santa may otherwise be too freaky or scary for younger kids – After all, it creeped out one of the judges.

If you’re willing to make a few changes, I’d like to talk to you about markets and distribution. There is a new company starting up next month that will be distributing shorts and creating opportunity for filmmakers to see some cashflow. Let me know.” -CJ Powers

Directors - Justin Cardoza, Matt Soriano, Kelsey Shryer
Actors - Andrew Carson & Mark Jenkins

A commercial for The Learning Institute.

(Note: Started YouTube process at 6:50 PM Mtn Standard Time - slow delay…)

“The film looks very nice.  Love the colors and the depth of field.  Nice moving shot at the beginning.  I think some of the close-ups could have been closer.  Also, I think the voices would have sold better if there had been some room tone and foley for the scribbling markers and the actors shifting clothes and swinging feet.” -Richard Ramsey
“This submission looks so sharp and was so well executed (the lip syncing is spot-on) that I was very disappointed it was in service to a mock commercial.This would have made a fantastic 1 min. skit with a story and/or punchline.” -Evan Derrick
“Great cinematography and lighting. Would have worked better with the kids voice as inner monologue instead of trying to match the mouths.” -Ash Greyson
“The ADR was a great idea - the concept of the video came off a bit more offensive than funny.” -Logan Sekulow
“Great acting. The talent did very well taking on the aura of the little kids. I loved the visual style, as it focused me into the personalities of the characters – A rarity and well appreciated. There are other great things I saw in this picture, but to save time, suffice it to say the direction in this film was smart.

Most short films have a lot of great elements, but they lack good directing. And, I’ve noticed that many times people can’t tell where great story and acting ends and where directing makes the difference. In fact, I’d venture to say the vast majority of the entrants don’t have a clue what it takes to be a great director versus a good director. However, in this film, the directing was wonderful or you got really lucky several times during your production.

Now, concerning the film being award winning or not, to rise to the top you would have to go back to a few frames and alter the lips to better synchronize the dialog. You could use After Effects so you wouldn’t have to bring the actors back in.

I also need to take a moment and share how good the story was and how well it could impact parents. Those with teenagers are always perplexed when their youth act like little kids and proud when they act like adults. The irony in your production is easily related to parents struggling with their kids needing to grow up. Therefore if you could interview some parents that have endured and overcome this type of struggle and find out what was key to their success, you could integrate it into your message and change the lives of millions of parents around the nation.

If I were you, I’d give it a shot. And, let me know when it’s done and I’ll help you get it into the market if you don’t already have another source to help you.” -CJ Powers

Directed and Produced by Joel Jost. Actors: Joel Jost, Emily Jost & Josiah Jost. Voice talents: Judah Jost, Hannah-Grace Jost & Amy-Joy Jost

A young boy attempts to make a replica of the Empire State Building out of cookies for his family for Christmas.

“Good framing. Music is too canned, audio mix rough. Not much story, needed a better payoff.” -Ash Greyson
“Nice retro piece – using the same style as many films during the 70s. There is only one problem with using a dated style and that is trying to figure out if it is coming back into vogue or if there was a reason it was left behind. In this case, the story was extremely cliché and the audience knew the outcome 10 – 15 seconds into the story and had to wait three times longer to verify that they already knew the ending – A sure recipe for disaster (no pun intended).

You clearly understand story flow. There are areas of technical improvement needing work. And, you need to improve your selection of a concept. Time will help you in each of those areas. However, the one thing you need above anything else is a passion to tell a story you really believe in. If you prefer comedy, then find good irony. If you prefer drama, then dig deep down in your heart for something that you can be passionate about. Film is unforgiving in that it reveals the filmmakers heart – depth or lack of depth. You must make something that has to be shared from your heart if you want to become great.” -CJ Powers

Director - Grace Pennington
Actor - Jacob Pennington
Actress - Lisa Pennington
Editor - Grace Pennington
Music - Jacob Pennington
Props - Lisa and Patience Pennington
Cinematography - Grace Pennington

A little boy enjoys the Holidays….in his own way.

“No clear story.” -Ash Greyson
“The one thing that will stop a cute kid and a cute dog from tugging at the hearts of the judges is a poorly developed story.

I will give you kudos for creating a story based on the security elements, but I would highly recommend that in the future you create a strong story that the security elements can be salted into somewhat unnoticed, rather than making them so obvious. You will also need to improve your technical skills to produce a higher quality film in order to compete.

And, congratulations to you for competing, as most beginning filmmakers don’t have the guts to do so.” -CJ Powers

Director/Producer/Videographer - Hannah Benjamin
Script/Story - Hannah and Miriam Benjamin
Music - Hannah Benjamin
Lead Vocals - Hannah Benjamin
Background Vocals - Celestial City
Little Boy - Isaac Benjamin
Dog - Cookies’n'Cream (aka)- CC

Special thanks to my sister Shoshanah for production help, and my mom for her patience.

A husband rings in the New Year with gusto.

“I like the idea of comically conveying, with a pay-off, that resolutions are easy at first but difficult to maintain.  So, I liked your wife’s last line.  I like the time lapsed writing, but I would have used audio from the pen-scribble that was not sped up.  The shots at the table w/ the family:  the interaction was heart-warming and charming, but the shots were dark and I thought we could have seen more straight on close-ups of you and the kids.  Also, the moment where your wife serves you food seemed muddled-you cut away from it too soon.  I thought the entire book shelf should have been dusty (and cobweb covered); not just the Bible.  But, I liked the “read me” bit.  I would have liked to have seen a close-up shot of your feet on the treadmill.  It seemed like all of your shots needed to be white balanced.  There was an odd fade edit in the last shot with your wife.  I think we could have lingered on your final stunned reaction to the film’s last line-I think you cut away too soon.  You did a good job in your performance (everyone in your film did), but, for the next contest, I would suggest you finding someone else to be the star of the film so that you can direct and run camera.” -Richard Ramsey
“Nice opening shot. Edits need to be tighter, music does not match. Watch using dissolves in edits. Needed a bigger payoff.” -Ash Greyson
“Family film projects are fun and not to be discouraged. Two of my kids are now media professionals due to our family film projects. So, I’m not going to point out the craft and skill improvements needed to bring your next film into the winning circle, but instead will remind you that film is an art form that deals with emotions. The experience needs to be fun and the film should be created out of important feelings residing in your heart – humorous or dramatic. The best news is that you clearly had fun and we could enjoy it with you.” -CJ Powers

Paul Munger
Greg Munger
Sheilah Munger

A little girl finds out that the true meaning of Christmas is not about Santa, but rather about the birth of our Savior, Jesus.

“Cute kids. Rough sound.” -Ash Greyson
“This first time film reveals a very nice concept and has a nice added touch at the end. Its production values will improve with each film experience and the actors will eventually be able to come across more natural. Eventually you’ll want to learn more about the technical side of the art form and I hope you continue to develop your story ideas in a way that will touch lives. Over all, it was a nice first time film.” -CJ Powers

Filmed by Oscar Gonzalez
Edited by Oscar Gonzalez
Fatima as herself
Adriana as herself
Special thanks to my mom for all of her help!

I’m from Canada and I would like to show you my top reasons for why you should visit.
(Okay, I’m way over time. First upload failed and was garbled, second took way too long; third failed again; fourth was the charm. So, I know this won’t make it, but, hope this can get out to the list for people to watch and hopefully enjoy.)

“Very funny performance and monologue.  I like how you moved in relation to the camera (and credited that to your editing score), but thought the camera should have occasionally moved as well (or been refocused)...if nothing else for the purpose of creating a shallow depth of field.  I also thought for comic effect you could have used audio besides dialogue.  For example, desolate, chilling wind-especially when you run far away from the camera.  The video was well-paced and entertaining.” -Richard Ramsey
“Kudos to you for pulling this off all by yourself.Your tight editing made what otherwise would have been a dull talking head interesting.” -Evan Derrick
“Goofy and enjoyable lead actor. Needed some sound (howling maybe) when he ran off like a dog. Not a developed “film” but a solid monologue. Nice pacing.” -Ash Greyson
“Controversy! That is the word I associate with a film that stirs arguments among the judges for over three hours. Should Canada take 1st, 2nd or 3rd place? Should the top films be marketable or just good? And, on and on the discussions went.

If I remember correctly, all judges laughed out loud with your film. One became a clear advocate for your film because of how it moved him with humor. Another wasn’t impressed because when all is said and done, the film didn’t add one bit to anyone’s life – Which started another argument.

The most important thing about film is to be a catalyst for healthy and Godly ideas/discussions. While your film certainly became a catalyst, it wasn’t necessarily for anything that would improve my life, perspective or the community in which I live. Frankly, aside from a few moments of laughter and several hours of arguments, I didn’t walk away with anything from your film that would help me to remember it a month from now.

Here’s the thing, I’m a little biased when I see someone with your talent, who has the ability to read the audience and make them laugh. I strongly desire that you make films that will change our hearts and thoughts. And so, I walk away from your film being disappointed that you didn’t use your skills to make a difference in my life. The irony is that I have no right to expect it of you. The choice is solely yours.

I am, however, thrilled that God has gifted you with incredible ability. I’m thankful that you brought laughter into my house and office. I’m glad your story was deemed by many of your peers to be the best. Clearly you are standing on the brink of a great future in film. Praise God!

Going forward, whether to plant seeds of joy into someone’s life or touch them in a way that changes their worldview forever, it is all your choice. You are not accountable to your peers, your audience or us judges. You are only accountable to God for the gifts he has given you. As a result, I highly recommend that you make intentional choices and don’t produce anything on a whim. Make the moment you have with the person you’ve never met that is watching your film count. Do it with purpose.

Congratulations on your achievement and high ranking.” -CJ Powers

Me, myself, and I.