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Re: Logline Ideas

by Oliver Lewis on Fri Mar 23, 2012 10:11am

Interesting point Philip. I hear what you’re saying.

Maybe a useful survival occupation—like a gardener or something…

In a futuristic America without electricity, a young gardener must rescue his brother from a lake of nuclear mist, risking his own life in the process.


Maybe a watchman… but that makes you think “Who goes?!!” type of thing. Too noisy.

[ Edited: Fri Mar 23, 2012 10:25am by Oliver Lewis ]
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Re: Logline Ideas

by Aubrey Hansen on Thu Mar 29, 2012 4:19pm

*happily drops loglines on Jordan’s desk*  I love getting your feedback on these things.  ^^

This is one for the short script I wrote for Benjamin Dawson…

Title:  My Dear Ralph
Genre: historical drama
Logline:  Based on a story by O. Henry, a professional safe cracker finds his business challenged when he falls in love with the banker’s daughter.

And this is the result of some brainstorming-while-trying-to-fall-asleep.  It’s never too early to write a logline, right?

Title:  Contraband
Genre:  dystopian thriller
Logline:  In a world where births are regulated by the government, a prominent official is put on the run when he discovers his mother obtained him illegally.

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Re: Logline Ideas

by Jordan Smith on Thu Mar 29, 2012 5:13pm

Aubrey Hansen wrote:

Title:  My Dear Ralph
Genre: historical drama
Logline:  Based on a story by O. Henry, a professional safe cracker finds his business challenged when he falls in love with the banker’s daughter.

Do you even need “Based on…”? Seems to me that it works without.

Title:  Contraband
Genre:  dystopian thriller
Logline:  In a world where births are regulated by the government, a prominent official is put on the run when he discovers his mother obtained him illegally.

I’m not sure if I would mess with “in a world” just because it sounds like a cliché movie trailer… Otherwise, I think this works.


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Re: Logline Ideas

by Aubrey Hansen on Thu Mar 29, 2012 5:57pm

Jordan Smith wrote:
Aubrey Hansen wrote:

Title:  My Dear Ralph
Genre: historical drama
Logline:  Based on a story by O. Henry, a professional safe cracker finds his business challenged when he falls in love with the banker’s daughter.

Do you even need “Based on…”? Seems to me that it works without.

Title:  Contraband
Genre:  dystopian thriller
Logline:  In a world where births are regulated by the government, a prominent official is put on the run when he discovers his mother obtained him illegally.

I’m not sure if I would mess with “in a world” just because it sounds like a cliché movie trailer… Otherwise, I think this works.

I think the “Based on” phrase is optional… It’s a nice tidbit, but unnecessary, but you can cut it off the sentence without needing to rewrite it, so it’s totally flexible.  smile

You mean rephrase “in a world”?  Because I think we need the part about births being regulated.  Or is that not what you meant?

Thanks SO much!

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Re: Logline Ideas

by Jordan Smith on Thu Mar 29, 2012 6:28pm

Aubrey Hansen wrote:

You mean rephrase “in a world”?  Because I think we need the part about births being regulated.  Or is that not what you meant?

Yeah, just those three words. You definitely need the rest.


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Re: Logline Ideas

by Aubrey Hansen on Thu Mar 29, 2012 6:41pm

Jordan Smith wrote:
Aubrey Hansen wrote:

You mean rephrase “in a world”?  Because I think we need the part about births being regulated.  Or is that not what you meant?

Yeah, just those three words. You definitely need the rest.

How ‘bout “In a society”?  Little less trailer-esque?

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Re: Logline Ideas

by Jordan Smith on Fri Mar 30, 2012 4:01am

I think that works.


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Re: Logline Ideas

by Aubrey Hansen on Fri Mar 30, 2012 8:38am

All righty.  Thank you so much!

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Re: Logline Ideas

by Bradley Jamrozik on Fri Mar 30, 2012 11:15am

Title: The Journey of Brotherhood
Genre: Golden Fleece
Logline: A supercilious teenager must enter a two-week race with his adventurous younger brother to prove to his parents that he doesn’t need boot camp to grow up.

Thoughts? I’ve had a few scenes floating around and developing in my head for a while; I’m just trying to figure out a story so I can make them! raspberry

(BTW Aubrey, I really like the script and logline for “Contraband”.)

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Re: Logline Ideas

by Aubrey Hansen on Fri Mar 30, 2012 12:09pm

Thank you!  :D

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